tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post3182793199403418037..comments2023-09-07T05:09:13.736-07:00Comments on Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: AbsenceAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03554662447246962880noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-78286628947897938372012-09-08T05:31:31.933-07:002012-09-08T05:31:31.933-07:00Really well done. I felt so much of their awkwardn...Really well done. I felt so much of their awkwardness, being trapped and trying to make the best of it. Victoria KPhttp://twitter.com/vic39firstnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-73454861679949406952012-09-06T19:15:11.755-07:002012-09-06T19:15:11.755-07:00Arranged marriages, how sad. Great story!Arranged marriages, how sad. Great story!Tessahttp://www.finallyawriter.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-80820215875788496142012-09-06T15:55:33.038-07:002012-09-06T15:55:33.038-07:00Oh, this is deliciously poignant. Your descriptio...Oh, this is deliciously poignant. Your description of the emptiness is so beautifully and delicately rendered. I especially like this line: She viewed her husband as just another decoration: occasionally dusted but otherwise set upon the shelf to be looked at every so often. <br /><br />I am rooting for them. Imeldahttp://mywordwall.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-7389907352993885042012-09-06T15:24:33.569-07:002012-09-06T15:24:33.569-07:00Annabelle hit the nail on the head with the word d...Annabelle hit the nail on the head with the word dystopian to describe this piece. It actually reminds of one of my favorite films, Brazil. I love that those bits are subtle, so that it's still relatable to current life. <br />Thanks for linking up. We hope to see you back soon.Triefctawritingchallengehttp://trifectawritingchallenge.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-39531053101019426062012-09-06T13:20:30.433-07:002012-09-06T13:20:30.433-07:00I like the twist - so now but so future...I like the twist - so now but so future...Maxnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-21150947121018838322012-09-05T22:08:04.824-07:002012-09-05T22:08:04.824-07:00Beautiful pacing here - I love how you took your t...Beautiful pacing here - I love how you took your time to fill us in (well, as much as one could expect in 333 words or less). I would *really* like to read more.Christinehttp://trudgingthroughfog.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-75652683952593413642012-09-05T19:13:43.878-07:002012-09-05T19:13:43.878-07:00I feel this could easily grow into a good story. B...I feel this could easily grow into a good story. But, as itself, it was very well done. <br />And such a sad thing. The absence of love is perhaps one of the worst.Renada Stylesnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-10131207930119619432012-09-05T11:48:50.429-07:002012-09-05T11:48:50.429-07:00The fragile relation has been nicely carved.The fragile relation has been nicely carved.Ruby Manchandanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-54597734042282959242012-09-05T09:03:04.075-07:002012-09-05T09:03:04.075-07:00The details you picked to tell your story were per...The details you picked to tell your story were perfect. And I love the twist it took. The premise is fantastic! Nice! :DLinda Vernonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-21297521173198501962012-09-04T23:34:28.572-07:002012-09-04T23:34:28.572-07:00interesting. you create a nice tension that makes ...interesting. you create a nice tension that makes me want to read moreSteve Lavignenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-40174847648723259492012-09-04T20:06:31.830-07:002012-09-04T20:06:31.830-07:00I love how you took this from ordinary stale marri...I love how you took this from ordinary stale marriage to a completely different world. Very cool!JannaTWriteshttp://jannatwrites.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-63492985042242358702012-09-04T17:43:15.971-07:002012-09-04T17:43:15.971-07:00ohhh. I like this. I would love to read more.ohhh. I like this. I would love to read more.deanabursonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-57561964969890297462012-09-04T14:22:23.121-07:002012-09-04T14:22:23.121-07:00I just love the world you've created here, and...I just love the world you've created here, and I especially love the way you got the absence in there.Jessie Powellhttp://jesterqueen.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-17265572863657252552012-09-04T14:20:48.087-07:002012-09-04T14:20:48.087-07:00This was a fascinating story -- and it leaves the ...This was a fascinating story -- and it leaves the window open with a touch of hope at the end. Very nice.Annette Mickelsonhttp://hoofprintsinmygarden.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-36307194734445640512012-09-04T14:19:00.695-07:002012-09-04T14:19:00.695-07:00What a dreadful life! And truthfully real for some...What a dreadful life! And truthfully real for some poor couples!Carriehttp://viewsfromnature.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-4478144554985899862012-09-04T14:00:21.304-07:002012-09-04T14:00:21.304-07:00Lumdog (unregistered) wrote:
Very cool story. St...Lumdog (unregistered) wrote:<br /><br />Very cool story. Starts out as your typical bored to tears couple and then we are witnessing the new world order. Nice job!kgwaitenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-62492632288467839032012-09-04T13:58:21.457-07:002012-09-04T13:58:21.457-07:00Very cool story. Starts out as your typical bored...Very cool story. Starts out as your typical bored to tears couple and then we are witnessing the new world order. Nice job!Lumdognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-77127961531058267832012-09-04T12:24:16.286-07:002012-09-04T12:24:16.286-07:00It's funny how dystopian this is with no more ...It's funny how dystopian this is with no more to suggest that than the word "disintegration" and the thought of thousands of loveless marriages. Bleak even though they clearly have the creature comforts.Annabellehttp://glassoffancy.com/noreply@blogger.com