tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post3496639858360776952..comments2023-09-07T05:09:13.736-07:00Comments on Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: Breaking PointAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03554662447246962880noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-40709721228732797222012-10-25T20:18:40.315-07:002012-10-25T20:18:40.315-07:00Oof. Impressive, and well done. I know that emptin...Oof. Impressive, and well done. I know that emptiness.wendrynnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-86417945615505301312012-10-25T06:15:45.733-07:002012-10-25T06:15:45.733-07:00This is fantastic. (I don't think I've eve...This is fantastic. (I don't think I've ever described a piece of writing in my life as "rich," but...) This is very rich, and atmospheric, and this character is extremely real and relatable. Awesome work!Kurtnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-82656795974042008902012-10-23T14:10:05.695-07:002012-10-23T14:10:05.695-07:00Totally not where I was expecting this to go, but ...Totally not where I was expecting this to go, but it worked perfectly. I just had my first encounter with that technology last month, too. Annabellehttp://glassoffancy.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-62765064142711051822012-10-22T19:18:02.284-07:002012-10-22T19:18:02.284-07:00this gave me the chills. And if any receptionist h...this gave me the chills. And if any receptionist had talked to me that way about my fingerprinting I probably would have walked out. Nicely done.Sandratylernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-90825578801308949362012-10-22T08:26:22.841-07:002012-10-22T08:26:22.841-07:00Liked this a lot. You paint a great picture of a &...Liked this a lot. You paint a great picture of a "day in the life of" Then hit us with the consequences. Also like the phrase “We're not in really control of anything, are?" and the implications of the fingerprinting. We need a sequal!jaumnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-58129130793498733962012-10-22T07:43:57.349-07:002012-10-22T07:43:57.349-07:00I didn't notice the prompt. That's a good...I didn't notice the prompt. That's a good thing. When you wrote "pregnancies 5, children, 0" I thought abortions. I had no idea where this was going. <br /><br />This was one of your best pieces, Kelly. Maybe even better than donky in the tub.<br /><br />Great work. The ending is perfect.Lancehttp://lancemyblogcanbeatupyourblog.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-89911560625838265232012-10-22T06:56:36.332-07:002012-10-22T06:56:36.332-07:00That ending is chilling, and the foreshadowing was...That ending is chilling, and the foreshadowing was AWESOME. She only touched the stroller!! But the story jumps in time, almost like she herself fades in and out of consciousness. Almost like she could have taken the baby. That line about the beach and the waves was fabulous. And I had never heard coquinas (I probably spelled that wrong) called bean clams! I always misnamed them periwinkles (which are something else entirely). Jessie Powellhttp://jesterqueen.com/noreply@blogger.com