tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post3621021449666548034..comments2023-09-07T05:09:13.736-07:00Comments on Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: FlyAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03554662447246962880noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-62094617406549404062013-07-16T08:42:20.693-07:002013-07-16T08:42:20.693-07:00Beautiful piece, Kelly. It's heart wrenching a...Beautiful piece, Kelly. It's heart wrenching and so vivid. Her pain is palpable. So glad I found you on this Facebook site for authors. Good luck.Linda Rosenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04737034884724532668noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-69518668640178205882013-07-16T07:37:45.806-07:002013-07-16T07:37:45.806-07:00I agree with the commenter who remarked that you&#...I agree with the commenter who remarked that you've made something beautiful out of an ugly scenario. <br /><br />Makes me want to read more! <br /><br />~Tui, visiting from the #StoryDam chat blog linkyTui Snider @mentalmosaichttp://www.mentalmosaic.com/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-4366571066550582292013-07-13T09:22:13.833-07:002013-07-13T09:22:13.833-07:00Oh, this so sad. The pain bleeds off of the page (...Oh, this so sad. The pain bleeds off of the page (screen?). Really well written. Lucyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09826808750354256820noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-92182619550639667682013-07-13T08:58:44.149-07:002013-07-13T08:58:44.149-07:00Heartbreaking in its power, yet so eloquent in its...Heartbreaking in its power, yet so eloquent in its language and imagery. An amazing piece of work, Kelly. I hope you submit this elsewhere for publication. injaynesworldhttp://injaynesworld.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-45365840341656686152013-07-12T10:18:59.574-07:002013-07-12T10:18:59.574-07:00You shook me. For the time I was reading, I felt t...You shook me. For the time I was reading, I felt that desolation as if it was my own.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-51548882689907594332013-07-12T07:25:08.047-07:002013-07-12T07:25:08.047-07:00I agree the repetition of 'they didn't say...I agree the repetition of 'they didn't say' was incredibly effective and that last line is a killer, especially because it is a secret they both carry.<br /><br />Wow. As usual fantastic writing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-29376966012214003612013-07-11T19:59:00.842-07:002013-07-11T19:59:00.842-07:00Powerful, heartbreaking, and painful to read. If o...Powerful, heartbreaking, and painful to read. If only this were "just fiction"...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00736632012288650571noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-61482228099893029662013-07-11T17:40:31.916-07:002013-07-11T17:40:31.916-07:00The use of gelatin and "congealed smile"...The use of gelatin and "congealed smile" is absolutely freaking brilliant. Wonderfully done. Travishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02886089228538677690noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-80291725390771918442013-07-11T15:12:34.538-07:002013-07-11T15:12:34.538-07:00What a terrible trap to be caught in. You've c...What a terrible trap to be caught in. You've captured the sense of entrapment and hopelessness so well!<br />The immediate dump from the first sentence into the second, and the later repetition is brilliant.kymmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18277722091216771412noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-19625213144245389542013-07-11T14:57:28.175-07:002013-07-11T14:57:28.175-07:00I agree with Tara.. your writing always amazes. A ...I agree with Tara.. your writing always amazes. A girlfriend from my yoga class recently told me her husband did exactly this - minus the beatings - it was all verbal abuse - he compared what she bought to receipts. He went through her credit card statements - everything. I was stunned to hear it knowing them both. Fortunately she found the courage to leave, and is now happily on her own. stephhttp://peopledothingswiththeirlives.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-77033612043478077922013-07-11T13:52:13.610-07:002013-07-11T13:52:13.610-07:00Your writing never ceases to amaze me.
Your writing never ceases to amaze me.<br />Tara R.https://www.blogger.com/profile/02993625193184914299noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-75669609172766369742013-07-11T10:45:01.547-07:002013-07-11T10:45:01.547-07:00The repetition of 'They didn't say' fo...The repetition of 'They didn't say' followed with the narrator's admission that now she knows, is very clever. Her story is tough, the writing is excellent.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-69455255856314038112013-07-11T10:06:05.148-07:002013-07-11T10:06:05.148-07:00Well done.I especially liked that it gut tightenin...Well done.I especially liked that it gut tightening without using purely emotion to allow the reader to feel it.LaTonya Baldwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17837979981517423142noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-44023534522098687922013-07-11T08:28:02.611-07:002013-07-11T08:28:02.611-07:00To not be able to even put the groceries away with...To not be able to even put the groceries away without permission is living under a level of control that few of us can imagine. Gut-wrenching story. Like Joe2's Political Discourse, your story is another sad commentary on our society and the lives of the citizens who live there. Brilliant work, as usual, Kelly! :)Thomas Charles MacInneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11331362298948608531noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-7190858173488298692013-07-11T07:41:28.354-07:002013-07-11T07:41:28.354-07:00ugh this was tough to read. so sad that some peopl...ugh this was tough to read. so sad that some people live like this. :(Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-80243798288345220752013-07-11T07:05:59.405-07:002013-07-11T07:05:59.405-07:00This is such a true story for so many women. You t...This is such a true story for so many women. You took something ugly, and pulled it back to the emotions beautifully.<br /><br />I hope she is able to fly away.Tracie Nallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07908908021649000930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-82500805702298614532013-07-11T06:47:25.069-07:002013-07-11T06:47:25.069-07:00Oh wow, this is so good and so intense. Poor woman...Oh wow, this is so good and so intense. Poor woman. Suzannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10380277216952785078noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-73271418929936725712013-07-11T06:21:42.903-07:002013-07-11T06:21:42.903-07:00*shudder* the grime and violence.. a great piece a...*shudder* the grime and violence.. a great piece and I love the compassion between the battered women... what happens to humanity?brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-67787205505848851042013-07-11T05:25:36.077-07:002013-07-11T05:25:36.077-07:00A very well-written and poignant story! The pain i...A very well-written and poignant story! The pain is palpable.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-26696580515816194182013-07-11T04:43:20.171-07:002013-07-11T04:43:20.171-07:00Gosh, powerful. And as always, so patiently writte...Gosh, powerful. And as always, so patiently written. Where do you come up with these vivid scenes? Wonderful.Sandra Tylerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13191775335774130719noreply@blogger.com