tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post3995967490687225222..comments2023-09-07T05:09:13.736-07:00Comments on Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: TroubleAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03554662447246962880noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-29564252977069398852012-05-18T04:21:54.216-07:002012-05-18T04:21:54.216-07:00I always love coming over here. You have a great s...I always love coming over here. You have a great style and your dialogue is as good as any I've read. This little scene is really well described. Thanks for linking up.Trifectahttp://twitter.com/trifectawritingnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-84417395965537392022012-05-17T23:30:27.147-07:002012-05-17T23:30:27.147-07:00"You can count on dead people the way you can..."You can count on dead people the way you can’t count on the living.” There's a lifetime of world weariness in that sentence. Loved it.The Gal Herselfhttp://onegalsmusings.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-68241684805364483532012-05-17T16:05:20.213-07:002012-05-17T16:05:20.213-07:00well done... some natural tension and easy to pict...well done... some natural tension and easy to picture setting as well!Frellenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-10754800391689075492012-05-17T12:01:06.549-07:002012-05-17T12:01:06.549-07:00The transition from lighthearted to heavy is perfe...The transition from lighthearted to heavy is perfect. As they dance around the elephant in the room, I imagine them swatting flies away from each other instead of just spraying on insect repellent in the first place.Jester Queenhttp://jesterqueen.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-44864169661255319432012-05-17T08:27:57.904-07:002012-05-17T08:27:57.904-07:00I could really get a sense of the delicate balance...I could really get a sense of the delicate balance of the relationship of these two characters. Great writing!Sherri Lackeyhttp://profiles.google.com/sherri.lackeynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-79102068932930088872012-05-16T20:01:37.732-07:002012-05-16T20:01:37.732-07:00Love the cemetery dialogue -- how much is unspoken...Love the cemetery dialogue -- how much is unspoken there. Well done. Great tension and hope to see where this leads!Sandrasfiberworksnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-30202147182049028952012-05-16T15:54:55.751-07:002012-05-16T15:54:55.751-07:00Neighbors, friends... the conversation was like ai...Neighbors, friends... the conversation was like air pushing against a soap bubble so carefully that it could only shift, rather than explode, a "careful ballet" describes it well. This one has potential for growth... will you be expanding on it?November Rainhttp://www.facebook.com/profile.php?id=1079541736noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-2768848548837956872012-05-16T14:27:25.478-07:002012-05-16T14:27:25.478-07:00A very comfortable scene between these two charact...A very comfortable scene between these two characters. You created a natural feel to their conversation.Tara R.http://thinspiralnotebook.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-88790732603419393332012-05-15T17:41:55.312-07:002012-05-15T17:41:55.312-07:00I like both of these characters - they are so much...I like both of these characters - they are so much deeper than what this scene conveys. The details you included made it feel like I was right there sipping coffee with them :)JannaTWriteshttp://jannatwrites.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-69793553045691392572012-05-15T14:18:08.155-07:002012-05-15T14:18:08.155-07:00This is really beautifully and delicately written....This is really beautifully and delicately written. I really want to read more of this now!poetrybythecluelessnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-52198741899938659962012-05-15T13:36:14.317-07:002012-05-15T13:36:14.317-07:00Beautiful dialog -- it conveys so much. And I gre...Beautiful dialog -- it conveys so much. And I grew up across the street from a cemetery!Annabellehttp://glassoffancy.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-24903581852556674732012-05-15T08:26:44.093-07:002012-05-15T08:26:44.093-07:00I like Agnes - living across the street from the c...I like Agnes - living across the street from the cemetery, having coffee with Frank... Hope to see more of them!Libbyhttp://libbysbookblog.blogspot.in/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-8069237537939216472012-05-15T03:19:56.934-07:002012-05-15T03:19:56.934-07:00Thank you, Diane!Thank you, Diane!kgwaitenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-69130478533237860372012-05-15T03:19:25.096-07:002012-05-15T03:19:25.096-07:00Thank you! This was from an old, old draft.Thank you! This was from an old, old draft.kgwaitenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-21803257699599208412012-05-14T21:52:47.201-07:002012-05-14T21:52:47.201-07:00I loved the line: He fingers worried a tiny tear i...I loved the line: He fingers worried a tiny tear in his work pants. I could see them both diverting their eyes from each other, trying to keep things nonchalant, but the underlying tension was palpable just beneath the surface. Excellent writing.Diane Turnernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-32841944516893815312012-05-14T21:05:13.804-07:002012-05-14T21:05:13.804-07:00I really loved this story. I could picture the sce...I really loved this story. I could picture the scene here so well. So beautifully written, so peaceful, so routine, yet so sad beneath the well-crafted surface. I really liked this one. Keep up the excellent writing! :)Scriptor Obscurahttp://scriptorwrites.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.com