tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post4636637282264212877..comments2023-09-07T05:09:13.736-07:00Comments on Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: RadicalAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03554662447246962880noreply@blogger.comBlogger31125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-26235745810432345172012-09-13T22:52:58.818-07:002012-09-13T22:52:58.818-07:00Spank is just the most perfect name ever. I like ...Spank is just the most perfect name ever. I like the dialogue, too. You tell a good story. Thanks for linking up.Trifectawritingchallengenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-9558005685720123372012-09-13T18:00:18.585-07:002012-09-13T18:00:18.585-07:00I've missed Lilly Jean, she is such a great ch...I've missed Lilly Jean, she is such a great character. You've created a wonderful, real, fun person.Tara R.http://thinspiralnotebook.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-78342846479819737882012-09-13T17:50:34.682-07:002012-09-13T17:50:34.682-07:00Love these characters and their spunky dialogue!Love these characters and their spunky dialogue!Mamarifichttp://twitter.com/Mamarificnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-51627097980212113572012-09-13T15:11:40.222-07:002012-09-13T15:11:40.222-07:00WONDERFUL dialect! Great read.WONDERFUL dialect! Great read.Melisa Luntnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-70698959015572920782012-09-13T13:55:47.082-07:002012-09-13T13:55:47.082-07:00So well written! I loved the dialect!So well written! I loved the dialect!werdyabnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-46880670595839710372012-09-13T11:40:14.188-07:002012-09-13T11:40:14.188-07:00This was tight and engaging. I loved the bit abou...This was tight and engaging. I loved the bit about sushi. Reminds me of my grandmother in her small town.Christie O Tatehttp://www.outlawmama.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-40989164739817094162012-09-13T04:11:38.000-07:002012-09-13T04:11:38.000-07:00I love that Lily Jean and Spank thought Pin Stripe...I love that Lily Jean and Spank thought Pin Stripes was a real character when I'd argue that they were the real characters!michellelongohttp://twitter.com/michellelongonoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-36257574417891546182012-09-12T21:24:22.301-07:002012-09-12T21:24:22.301-07:00I tink I'd like to spend the day with Spank an...I tink I'd like to spend the day with Spank and Lily Jan. I,love your voice.Paula Jnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-32699804952461269932012-09-12T19:24:16.660-07:002012-09-12T19:24:16.660-07:00You did a really great job creating a good dialogu...You did a really great job creating a good dialogue in what I'm guessing is not your normal dialect? ;-)<br />Great view into the life of Lilly Jean and Spank!Dawn Beronillahttp://www.happinesscubed.net/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-60955615695213408982012-09-12T18:25:43.146-07:002012-09-12T18:25:43.146-07:00I love sushi, but don't think I would buy it f...I love sushi, but don't think I would buy it from Spank and Lilly Jean!Bill-The Authentic Lifehttp://www.living-authentically.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-88091088867040702412012-09-12T18:07:11.414-07:002012-09-12T18:07:11.414-07:00I agree with the rest of your fans - loved the sto...I agree with the rest of your fans - loved the story, dialect and dialogue. I enjoyed the surprise foodie references along the way ... well done.Mary Nelliganhttp://ateachablemom.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-38598399777485280052012-09-12T14:24:25.886-07:002012-09-12T14:24:25.886-07:00Amazing dialog. I would find it hard to write thos...Amazing dialog. I would find it hard to write those accents but you did a great job!Stacie @ Snaps and Bitshttp://www.snapsandbits.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-49727923630835315272012-09-12T12:52:03.153-07:002012-09-12T12:52:03.153-07:00I wantI wantChange The Topichttp://twitter.com/changethetopicnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-74649456199652867492012-09-12T11:12:02.111-07:002012-09-12T11:12:02.111-07:00This was really good. You did the dialogue well. S...This was really good. You did the dialogue well. Sometime is stumble when reading dialect but this flowed smoothly and I don't think that was just because I'm a southerner too. I could see the characters in my head as the story progressed. Nice! on Radical<br />Remove content | Delete | Spam<br />Treading Water in the Kiddiekgwaitenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-83029406831089949132012-09-12T10:05:57.127-07:002012-09-12T10:05:57.127-07:00This was really good. You did the dialogue well. ...This was really good. You did the dialogue well. Sometime is stumble when reading dialect but this flowed smoothly and I don't think that was just because I'm a southerner too. I could see the characters in my head as the story progressed. Nice!Treading Water in the Kiddie Poolhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07200936787006653961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-24125485330644518902012-09-11T21:46:31.553-07:002012-09-11T21:46:31.553-07:00This story is so good, from the dialect to the dia...This story is so good, from the dialect to the dialogue - love it :)JannaTWriteshttp://jannatwrites.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-45895139527664366682012-09-11T21:04:19.299-07:002012-09-11T21:04:19.299-07:00I truly enjoyed this! I laughed out loud reading i...I truly enjoyed this! I laughed out loud reading it. I could hear the accented dialogue in my head as I read. :)Flippa Birdnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-41303339734453058812012-09-11T18:29:53.705-07:002012-09-11T18:29:53.705-07:00I love how they're looking down at radical foo...I love how they're looking down at radical food types but they have sushi on the menu.PlaceofGreaterSafetyhttp://twitter.com/greatersafetynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-31920360619520261832012-09-11T17:34:42.027-07:002012-09-11T17:34:42.027-07:00I love how it flows like, "Here we go, folksy...I love how it flows like, "Here we go, folksy restaurant banter, nice character piece and dialogue" and then all of a sudden sushi and veganism get dropped in like "Duh." It's 2012. In age of the smart phone folksy knows sushi. Nicely written. I loved how the dialect didn't get in the way of the dialogue.Larksnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-13701863916103864202012-09-11T15:10:35.979-07:002012-09-11T15:10:35.979-07:00Hahahaha #veganproblems. Hahahaha #veganproblems. Mayor Giahttp://www.mayorgia.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-49825288548724696732012-09-11T11:19:55.641-07:002012-09-11T11:19:55.641-07:00NOTE: This comment is waiting for your approval. I...NOTE: This comment is waiting for your approval. It is not yet published on your site.<br /><br />======<br />Lumdog (unregistered) wrote:<br /><br />The dialogue and characters are perfect. I'm sitting in that restaurant like a fly on the wall. I think I'd just get a burger and fries. Nicely done!kgwaitenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-4754632049917633262012-09-11T11:14:33.152-07:002012-09-11T11:14:33.152-07:00The dialogue and characters are perfect. I'm ...The dialogue and characters are perfect. I'm sitting in that restaurant like a fly on the wall. I think I'd just get a burger and fries. Nicely done!Lumdognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-86018894913487387322012-09-11T10:55:25.579-07:002012-09-11T10:55:25.579-07:00I missed this group... You always leave us wanting...I missed this group... You always leave us wanting more... Annabelle hit it with "grandstanding for each other".jaumnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-6344159486569909822012-09-11T10:44:29.821-07:002012-09-11T10:44:29.821-07:00this just flows so wonderfully. The cadence and tw...this just flows so wonderfully. The cadence and twang and expression. You've nailed these characters, Kelly.<br /><br />Awesome :)Carriehttp://viewsfromnature.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8009654420271577413.post-48237899718578548232012-09-11T10:19:14.217-07:002012-09-11T10:19:14.217-07:00I love that line, "People think we’re a bunch...I love that line, "People think we’re a bunch of idiots here." I live in a small town and get that frequently. I just sigh and think, "We're in a small college town in Iowa, which means we're all smarter than you, anyway."IASoupMamahttp://www.iasoupmama.com/noreply@blogger.com