Lost

The excavator bites and tears.  The developer figures profit.
Happy couples outline visions; dream of pretty lives.
The farmer removes his cap, wipes his face and turns aside.
His vision is no more.

This was written in response to the Trifecta Writing Challenge.  We were to write a story entitled Lost.

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Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: Lost

Friday, March 16, 2012

Lost

The excavator bites and tears.  The developer figures profit.
Happy couples outline visions; dream of pretty lives.
The farmer removes his cap, wipes his face and turns aside.
His vision is no more.

This was written in response to the Trifecta Writing Challenge.  We were to write a story entitled Lost.

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17 Comments:

At March 16, 2012 at 1:43 PM , Anonymous The Mommy Patient said...

You have a real talent for telling such an elaborate story with so few words.

 
At March 16, 2012 at 3:11 PM , Anonymous Booguloo said...

Thoughts multiple. Nice write.

 
At March 16, 2012 at 3:32 PM , Anonymous naturegirl said...

Oh mY! I did not see that coming. Great take on the theme. Thanks for sharing...

 
At March 16, 2012 at 4:25 PM , Anonymous StephanieC said...

Love this. Makes me sad.
I learned early on in class that subdivisions are named after the very things that they destroy ("Deer Crossing", "Meadowlands". etc.)

 
At March 16, 2012 at 4:56 PM , Anonymous Natalie Rod said...

Farmers, so under appreciated. I like this very much.

 
At March 16, 2012 at 5:14 PM , Anonymous Aimee Davis said...

Oooh. Disdain for the urban sprawl, replacing our hide-and-seek counting trees with walls and fences and concrete. Mother Earth will take it back. Life always finds a way. Nice job.

 
At March 16, 2012 at 9:16 PM , Anonymous Ruby Manchanda said...

Quite a genius there.
I like the picture painting that happens here.
Regards,
Ruby

 
At March 17, 2012 at 3:56 AM , Anonymous Deborah Lawrenson said...

Succinct, wide-ranging - and powerful. Like it!

 
At March 17, 2012 at 6:35 AM , Anonymous Paulatc said...

Best I have read so far. Really extraordinary take and very moving. Thanks for "showing me up!" :lol:

 
At March 17, 2012 at 9:26 AM , Anonymous Fran said...

What a great take on this weekend's prompt! Nicely done.

 
At March 17, 2012 at 10:10 AM , Anonymous The Gal Herself said...

Aw, this is great. My best friend has told me many times about his grandfather whose farm was purchased out from under him by the State of Colorado -- "imminent domain" -- for its water rights. They compensated him well, but the thing is, Grandpa didn't want money, he wanted his farm. So your 33 words ring very true for me.

 
At March 17, 2012 at 6:34 PM , Anonymous Jessie Powell said...

I hope that doesn't mean Jonathan gave in! I ache for that farmer. I have known him.

 
At March 17, 2012 at 10:11 PM , Anonymous karen said...

This is so solid, gets in everything one needs, speaks to today, so much information for 33 words. This is a favourite of mine for this week. Beautiful.

 
At March 18, 2012 at 7:26 AM , Anonymous Tara R. said...

Excellent 33 words, so such said, so much conveyed.

 
At March 18, 2012 at 12:47 PM , Anonymous Trifeta said...

This is an incredibly complete story for only 33 words. Great writing. Thanks for linking up and hopefully see you for the weekday challenge starting on Monday.

 
At March 18, 2012 at 10:50 PM , Blogger Amelia said...

Ohhh, my heart breaks!!

 
At March 19, 2012 at 2:35 PM , Anonymous Amelia said...

So so sad!!

 

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