Earl Grey


Broken-hearted lovers. Wedgewood china. Every moment a play with lines to memorize.

He steps out of character. "I want a divorce."

She drops her cup, watches the stain creep across the Persian rug.

This was written for this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge.

This weekend we are bringing you back to class with a little refresher course on compound modifiers.  We are talking about two words that combine together to describe something.  Such as a well-rounded individual or aone-way street or a lightly-oiled pan.  Here's a fun Trifextra trick: conventionally, if the compound modifier comes BEFORE the word it modifies, it requires a hyphen and counts as one word.  If it comes AFTER the noun, it doesn't need a hyphen and counts as two. 

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Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: Earl Grey

Saturday, April 27, 2013

Earl Grey


Broken-hearted lovers. Wedgewood china. Every moment a play with lines to memorize.

He steps out of character. "I want a divorce."

She drops her cup, watches the stain creep across the Persian rug.

This was written for this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge.

This weekend we are bringing you back to class with a little refresher course on compound modifiers.  We are talking about two words that combine together to describe something.  Such as a well-rounded individual or aone-way street or a lightly-oiled pan.  Here's a fun Trifextra trick: conventionally, if the compound modifier comes BEFORE the word it modifies, it requires a hyphen and counts as one word.  If it comes AFTER the noun, it doesn't need a hyphen and counts as two. 

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33 Comments:

At April 27, 2013 at 3:27 PM , Anonymous steph said...

Lines to memorize - he steps out of character - a well-played scene. Nice job.

 
At April 27, 2013 at 4:05 PM , Blogger Atreyee said...

Wow!Loved this-great word play,I could see the scene play out in front of my eyes clearly:-)

 
At April 27, 2013 at 7:04 PM , Blogger Ruby Manchanda said...

You wove so much beauty in their sadness.

 
At April 27, 2013 at 11:24 PM , Anonymous injaynesworld said...

I need to read this again when I haven't had so much wine.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 5:45 AM , Blogger Tara R. said...

A very visual scene in so few words. Wonderful.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 5:50 AM , Blogger Draug said...

This is pretty awesome. It fits together so well.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 5:51 AM , Blogger Ann Bennett said...

Excellent phrasing, "steps out of character",we do argue the same way all the time. Excellent.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 6:38 AM , Blogger Trifecta Editor said...

The whole piece is set up so well, and it unfolds beautifully to its shocking ending. Great job with the prompt.

Thanks for linking up!

 
At April 28, 2013 at 7:22 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Steph! Looking forward to reading your entry this week.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 7:22 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks so much!

 
At April 28, 2013 at 7:23 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks Ruby and thanks also for the Tweets.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 7:23 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks for reading, Jayne

 
At April 28, 2013 at 7:23 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Tara.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 7:24 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Draug!

 
At April 28, 2013 at 7:24 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Ann - This was originally much longer and after I cut it, I was afraid the meaning wouldn't come through as well. Glad you liked it.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 7:25 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks for the great prompt!

 
At April 28, 2013 at 8:37 AM , OpenID grandmalin said...

I love this - what an excellent piece of writing, saying so much with so few words. Big thumbs up.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 9:54 AM , Blogger Valerie said...

The broken pieces of the cup-and the marriage paint such a poignant picture here. Beautifully done!

 
At April 28, 2013 at 11:26 AM , OpenID jannatwrites said...

How sad that their relationship became that much of a rut. The play with lines to memorize was a beautiful way to depict the monotony of their world.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 12:40 PM , Anonymous Rossandra White said...

Nailed it! Tone, characterization and drama.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 12:52 PM , OpenID lenadealmeida said...

Powerful and beautiful!

 
At April 28, 2013 at 1:04 PM , Blogger Suzanne said...

This is fantastic! Love the reference to Wedgwood and him stepping out of character. Well done!

 
At April 28, 2013 at 2:23 PM , Blogger tedstrutz said...

Nice one!

 
At April 28, 2013 at 5:05 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks so much - I loved your piece.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 5:06 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks so much - Loved your piece as well.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 5:07 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks so much - I originally had them memorizing their lines for the sake of the children, but ended up with way too many words.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 5:08 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thank you! And congrats on your book!

 
At April 28, 2013 at 5:11 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks for reading!

 
At April 28, 2013 at 5:14 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks so much! I have a collection of tea cups, my inspiration for this week.

 
At April 28, 2013 at 5:15 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Ted!

 
At April 28, 2013 at 10:57 PM , Blogger Sam Edge said...

Wedgewood China - love that it's so random and domestic!

 
At April 29, 2013 at 1:33 AM , Blogger kymm said...

This is just gorgeous, Kelly, from start to finish, title and all!

 
At April 29, 2013 at 12:41 PM , OpenID lindavernon said...

Bravo Kelly. You can really write. "He steps out of character, "I want a divorce." A tiny phrase that sums up a thousand words!

 

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