Love Story in 33 Words

They met in June.

They fell in love.

But there were spouses; children; careers.

With shattered hearts, they held their families together.

Sundays, they smiled wistfully at each other from across the room.

This piece was written in response to The Trifecta Writing Challenge: Write a love story in exactly 33 words.

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Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: Love Story in 33 Words

Saturday, January 28, 2012

Love Story in 33 Words

They met in June.

They fell in love.

But there were spouses; children; careers.

With shattered hearts, they held their families together.

Sundays, they smiled wistfully at each other from across the room.

This piece was written in response to The Trifecta Writing Challenge: Write a love story in exactly 33 words.

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17 Comments:

At January 28, 2012 at 4:44 AM , Anonymous TLanceB said...

sometimes their are wistful smile other times their are playful pats and pinches

lovely

 
At January 28, 2012 at 5:55 AM , Anonymous Kim said...

So much said in such few words. This was heavy and good.

 
At January 28, 2012 at 6:41 AM , Anonymous Satu Gustafson said...

Ugh the worst! You can feel their pain in just 33 words. Well done!

 
At January 28, 2012 at 7:07 AM , Anonymous Anna Smith said...

Beautifully done :)

 
At January 28, 2012 at 7:19 AM , Anonymous Crosshavenharpist said...

Oh god! Beautiful, Kelly! Absolutely beautiful and heartrending all at once. Awesome.

Btw Meg sent me your writing....implant to curl

 
At January 28, 2012 at 7:20 AM , Anonymous Crosshavenharpist said...

Kelly, beautiful! Absolutely heartrending! You accomplished so much in such a short space.

JM

 
At January 28, 2012 at 7:35 AM , Anonymous jesterqueen1 said...

This made me think instantly of my mother. After she and my Dad divorced, I found out by coincidence that she had once met someone she loved, that they had never acted on it, and that the reason they hadn't acted on it was her unwillingness to jeapordize her marriage. And then, the guy had died in a motorcycle crash, and she couldn't even properly mourn him. Holy christ I haven't thought of that in years.

 
At January 28, 2012 at 7:36 AM , Anonymous Carrie said...

So many ways to look at this. It could be that the craziness of life got between them. Or it could be they desire a love affair but can't due to circumstances

 
At January 28, 2012 at 10:11 AM , Anonymous Elizabeth Young said...

Maybe it just gave them enough courage to keep going for their families...

 
At January 28, 2012 at 10:48 AM , Anonymous karen said...

The bittersweet of making the choice between potential bliss and lives lived in harmony, above reproach. Beautiful.

 
At January 28, 2012 at 1:47 PM , Anonymous Michael Yost said...

That's a heart breaker.

 
At January 28, 2012 at 4:47 PM , Anonymous Tara R. said...

There is something very tragic about a forbidden love.

 
At January 28, 2012 at 5:13 PM , Anonymous Amelia said...

Very intriguing.

 
At January 28, 2012 at 11:07 PM , Anonymous Megan said...

This conveys pain and frustration in the face of two different kinds of love very powerfully.

 
At January 29, 2012 at 4:09 PM , Anonymous joules said...

I love this because of the parallel love stories - the romantic affair and the love for children and family. Nice work.

 
At January 30, 2012 at 12:37 AM , Anonymous Shah Wharton said...

Beautiful - The last line is almost painful. X

 
At January 30, 2012 at 5:21 AM , Anonymous Trifeta said...

Great response to the prompt, Kelly. This is beautifully written and you capture so much emotion in 33 words. I love the backdrop of the church on Sundays, adding another dimension to their forbidden love. See you for the weekday prompt!

 

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