Santa's boots and crinkled lists.
Harried faces and crying children.
Love bound in ribbon and credit
cards.
“Never mind.” She turned away.
Enpty-handed, she left the mall,
humming a carol to herself.
~end~
This was written for this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge.
For the weekend challenge, we're asking you to write exactly 33 words about rebellion and/or revolt. Interpret it as you will, just keep it to 33 words.
I really like the flow and rhythm of this. And it's a very timely message.
ReplyDeleteNow that's a revolution I could join :)
ReplyDeleteI ditto what Janna said :)
ReplyDeletePerfect!
ReplyDeleteI like this!
ReplyDeleteI would join that rebellion.
ReplyDeleteA cause I can get behind! (:
ReplyDeleteNow THAT would be a revolution.
ReplyDeleteI agree with everyone here. Stop the commercialism.
ReplyDeleteTaking a stand, one anti-shopper at a time!
ReplyDeleteI think if it's done right, if those gifts are given in love, in rememberance of who we are celebrating ...then it can be a good thing. Christmas is a happy, giving time. I buy gifts for the people I love and we give to charities...I don't make a big deal of it, and tell lots of people. I don't put up a billboard of what I'm DOING with that money, I'm just paying forward something to someone else.
ReplyDeleteI love Santa, I love baby Jesus, I love this time of year where I feel like we are "All human beings to one another", I choose to celebrate it with gifts for the people I love...and gifts to those who might not have a merry Christmas.
however, i love the way you wrote it, I love the wording you chose. I do agree that the greed needs to be taken out of Christmas.
SO glad I stopped by.
Right on 'target' Kelly. Well done and congrats on the 2nd place win - and the one before that! Well deserved, and then some...
ReplyDeleteGood one!
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