We found her at the mouth of Silver
Creek.
We found her beside a tree stump
sharpened to a point by the beavers who regularly felled the trees to
transform Silver Creek into a pond quiet and anonymous and secret.
Thirty years back, we used to step
across that creek. How many gallons of water filled this place now?
We found her where I've stood with my
hands in the back pockets of my jeans, watching the concentric
circles—echoes of a stone thrown—widen and ripple before fading
away to stillness.
But a body of water—even a pond—is
never stagnant, even when it appears to be. And my daughter, so
silent and still, is so much more than people think she is.
I hate when her schoolmates mock her.
I hate it more when they ignore her.
I'd told her time and time again not to
come down here alone. There are hunters in these woods. And the water
is deep.
But how can you keep a child from
nature?
And should you, even if you could?
We found her facing the cattails
growing in the icy marshland and I remembered, as I ran, how I tried
once upon a time to catch a trout with one, and failed.
We found one of her red boots turned
upside down in the snow. We found her orange scarf coated with ice.
We found her sitting on a log staring out over the water.
“Cari!” I shouted.
She turned and gave me a toothless
grin. She stood barefoot in the snow and laughed.
I pulled my cell phone from my pocket
and dialed. “We found her.” I picked her up and wrapped her in my
jacket. “Let's go home,” I said.
The beavers will continue cutting their
trees.
Her classmates will continue laughing
at my daughter.
And she will continue to find solace
among nature, beside the laughing stream.
so vivid and touching. Great writing as always.
ReplyDeleteenthralling write :-)
ReplyDeleteBeautifully done.
ReplyDeleteah, lovely! so vivid and such great attention to detail.
ReplyDeleteScary, and beautiful.
ReplyDeleteTruly scary! I'm so glad she was found relatively in one piece, so many of the entries this week have been so bloodthirsty I was really worried and though my heart ached for a little girl on the edges of society that visceral reaction was rolled over by relief that she was found, loved and seen so clearly by her mother. Whew!
ReplyDeleteI love the interspersed memories of nature's healing. You do a great job of keeping the tensions going here; I was a little nervous about whether she'd be okay when she was found.
ReplyDeleteReally good writing!
ReplyDeleteI went dark and on my God something and somebody is dead and it's awful....
ReplyDeleteOf course you write too well to make it that quick, easy and predictable. good job.
Ethereal comes to mind. Beautiful writing. I'm glad she was alive. You took us on a ride, and then relief. Terrific.
ReplyDeleteGREAT DISCRIPTIVE WRITING
ReplyDeleteThis was eerie but good. I thought at first they had found her dead. The ending was a relief.
ReplyDeleteAll I could think throughout the entire story was poor little girl. :( I also wonder if she's autistic from this story. Don't know why but for some reason it just sounds like something is off with her.
ReplyDeletewhat a mouth-full of toothless-grinned joy! nice turn of the tides :)
ReplyDeletethe scariest thing for a parent . . . the loss of a child, if just for a time. well done.
ReplyDeletethere is a repeat of "let's go home" and the wrapping in a coat - was that intentional?
Whew!My heart had dropped thinking the unthinkable-so glad that she was safe-great piece:-)
ReplyDeleteThere was something stunning about your imagery here...the concentric circles...red boots turned upside down in the snow.
ReplyDeleteI was frightened for her! So glad it was only an escape to the pond. This was beautifully done.
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