Pierced


Arrows rain from the sky, piercing dreams of rebellion. I remember when freedom was more than whispered memories birthed silently as we worked under the watchful water-masters, gathering drops of dew to quench the king's thirst.

This was written for this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge. We were to use the words remember, rain and rebellion to create a 36 word piece.


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Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: Pierced

Saturday, March 23, 2013

Pierced


Arrows rain from the sky, piercing dreams of rebellion. I remember when freedom was more than whispered memories birthed silently as we worked under the watchful water-masters, gathering drops of dew to quench the king's thirst.

This was written for this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge. We were to use the words remember, rain and rebellion to create a 36 word piece.


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20 Comments:

At March 23, 2013 at 5:13 PM , Anonymous barbara said...

such nice phrases here - esp. "whispered memories birthed silently" wow!

 
At March 23, 2013 at 6:25 PM , Anonymous injaynesworld said...

I'm intrigued to know more about these "watchful water-masters." You've drawn me as always, Kelly.

 
At March 23, 2013 at 9:15 PM , Blogger Ruby Manchanda said...

Stunner

 
At March 23, 2013 at 10:26 PM , OpenID rangewriter said...

Despite a limited palatte, you've painted a vivid picture.

 
At March 24, 2013 at 6:33 AM , Blogger Suzanne said...

I love your opening line - wonderful visuals and it really sets the mood. I'm intrigued too! Interesting world you've painted in so few words.

 
At March 24, 2013 at 11:21 AM , Blogger Lori Bane Wise said...

Nice imagery!

 
At March 24, 2013 at 2:34 PM , Blogger Maggie said...

Agree with others...wonderful imagery and wanting more.

 
At March 24, 2013 at 2:47 PM , Blogger Vanessa V Kilmer said...

What an interesting and intriguing concept, "gathering drops of dew to quench the king's thirst."

 
At March 24, 2013 at 4:24 PM , Blogger kymm said...

freedom as whispered memory... lovely kelly

 
At March 24, 2013 at 5:02 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Barbara!

 
At March 24, 2013 at 5:02 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thank you Jayne. Hope to see you at Trifecta soon.

 
At March 24, 2013 at 5:02 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Ruby!

 
At March 24, 2013 at 5:02 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thank you. Yeah, I had to delete 40 words to fit the requirements.

 
At March 24, 2013 at 5:03 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks so much, Suzanne.

 
At March 24, 2013 at 5:03 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thank you, Lori!

 
At March 24, 2013 at 5:03 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Maggie. Hoping to expand this a bit.

 
At March 24, 2013 at 5:04 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Vanessa - I was thinking in terms of a water shortage or even a complete lack of a reliable water source, but had to end before I could finish!

 
At March 24, 2013 at 5:04 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Kymm!

 
At March 24, 2013 at 8:32 PM , OpenID trudgingthroughfog said...

Fabulous! I love that you introduce us to a whole world in such a tiny piece! That first line is so anguished. Great job.

 
At March 25, 2013 at 5:23 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks so much for reading!

 

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