Stone

My parents utterly and completely believed in their right to have a place in this world. They laughed loudly; smiled broadly; closed every party while I sat like stone wondering where I fit.

This was written for this weekend's Trifecta Writing Challenge and is the first line to a short story I'm working on. The word was stone.



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Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: Stone

Friday, March 8, 2013

Stone

My parents utterly and completely believed in their right to have a place in this world. They laughed loudly; smiled broadly; closed every party while I sat like stone wondering where I fit.

This was written for this weekend's Trifecta Writing Challenge and is the first line to a short story I'm working on. The word was stone.



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16 Comments:

At March 8, 2013 at 2:13 PM , Anonymous injaynesworld said...

Yes. I can picture this perfectly, Kelly.

 
At March 8, 2013 at 2:51 PM , OpenID trudgingthroughfog said...

The disconnect between parents and child - how very relatable. Great opening line. Can't wait to see where it goes!

 
At March 8, 2013 at 4:35 PM , Blogger Suzanne said...

This is so good! I love how this piece feels so balanced - and I love the emotion inside it. Well done!

 
At March 8, 2013 at 7:09 PM , Blogger Lance said...

greatness

This was my childhood, Kelly. I'm floored. This was great.

 
At March 8, 2013 at 7:15 PM , Anonymous Anonymous said...

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At March 8, 2013 at 10:35 PM , OpenID jannatwrites said...

This is so sad. I wonder if the parents don't realize the disconnect, or if they don't care. I'm afraid it's the latter.

 
At March 9, 2013 at 3:10 AM , Blogger November Rain - k~ said...

Brings a familiar moment back to the forefront.

 
At March 9, 2013 at 10:07 AM , OpenID joe2poetry said...

A nice beginning. It has gotten me interested.

 
At March 9, 2013 at 2:11 PM , Blogger Atreyee said...

Sometimes it does happen that a child is very unlike the parents in more ways than seems possible.An interesting take on the prompt Kelly & am so glad to note that there is a story that is taking shape:-)Looking forward to reading it

 
At March 9, 2013 at 5:14 PM , Blogger Rambly T said...

I read - I thought of what age the 'child' is? In retrospect does it matter? Though in saying that and the child a teenager - then they unfortunately do not attempt to 'fit in' either. Interesting take.

 
At March 9, 2013 at 10:02 PM , Blogger Ruby Manchanda said...

Great.

 
At March 10, 2013 at 4:44 AM , Blogger Trifecta said...

This is great, Kelly.

 
At March 10, 2013 at 8:10 AM , Blogger Draug said...

I felt like this sometimes growing up. It's a pretty bad feeling :/ You captured it well!

 
At March 10, 2013 at 10:31 AM , Blogger Bo said...

I know this feeling all to well. Very good.

 
At March 10, 2013 at 11:32 PM , Anonymous barbara said...

oh, poor child

 
At March 11, 2013 at 4:04 AM , Blogger kymm said...

The idea of a stone trying to fit in conveys the hopelessness perfectly. Nice one.

 

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