Frank gestures to the Post-it Notes
decorating three walls of Phillip's cardboard box. "I know you
ain't wrote these yourself, 'cause I know you can't read and write."
Phillip hangs his head. His mother had
tried to teach him for four years, slapping him when the words he
tried so hard to fit into his brain refused to cooperate. In the end,
she'd turned him out, two months shy of nine. He's spent the better
part of the past eight years living in cardboard boxes. "The
words never stuck," Phillip says now, ashamed.
Frank scoots over to one of the walls
and begins reading. "Believe," he says, then snorts. "Why
you put these up here?"
"They're pretty," Phillip
says. "I like the pattern they make. I got the blues over there
and the yellows..."
"Proverbs 27:17. Like I got a
Bible on me to look that up." Frank glances at Phillip. "Who
wrote these?"
"Evelyn McReedy." Phillip
beams.
"Social worker?"
"No."
"Homeless lady?"
Phillip shakes his head. "Every
day she stops outside and hands me a ten dollar bill wrapped inside
one of these notes."
"She sweet on you?" Frank
teases.
Phillip feels himself blush. "She
never looks at me."
"How you know her name then?"
"I heard her one day, sayin' it
into her phone. 'Evelyn McReedy, Attorney.'"
"What you do with the cash?"
"I don't care about the money. I
just like the notes."
"Can't eat notes," Franks
says. "How she dress?"
"Real nice," Phillip says.
"Rich-like?"
Phillip nods.
Frank grins and yanks a note from the
wall. "Exhaust all possibilities," he reads.
"Put that back." Phillip
reaches.
Frank stuffs the note into his pocket.
"Where you going?"
"I got to pay my attorney a
visit."
After Frank leaves, Phillip stares at
the blank space on the wall. What can he do? Frank is smarter.
Bigger. Faster. Frank can read. "Exhaust all possibilities,"
Phillip whispers. He backs out of his cardboard home and gives chase
to Frank.
This was written for this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge. The word was exhaust.
This is very nicely done ... I want more ...
ReplyDeleteThis is very intriguing, the dialogue feels so real. I want to know how it continues :(
ReplyDeletebrilliant -- that's all i can say. well done!
ReplyDeleteI love the dialogue here -- well done!
ReplyDeleteAwesome! If this were the start to a novel or a longer story, I would read on eagerly. What a great set up, and such interesting characters to have a conflict.
ReplyDeleteOh, good for Phillip. I'm not sure what exactly Frank has in mind, but I'm pretty sure I don't want him to get it. Your descriptions here are spare but the characters come through really well with the details you've chosen.
ReplyDeleteThis is terrific. Very good dialogue.
ReplyDeleteWhat a great plot you unfold. I agree with others, we need more!
ReplyDeleteOn another note, Just finished and reread "The Rebirth" in your book. One of my all time favorites!
nice. I got to get to my own trifecta, haven't had a chance to do it yet. Barely got my Tale Tues up with the kids home again...
ReplyDeleteI love the natural interaction between the two characters. I want to know more!
ReplyDeleteThe product is natural and minus аny side-еffеctѕ and claimed to givе ѵisible benеfits in beneath 4 wееks.
ReplyDeletemy web pаge articlecommentary.Com
My web site - jbcourse.com
Excellent - I'd love to see what happens here
ReplyDeleteDove right into that one, and love the resolution!
ReplyDeletedifferent. NIcely done.
ReplyDeleteAwesome, kelly.. I can't get past the horror of a mother turning her kid out onto the streets 2 months shy of nine. Great title, dialog and ending!
ReplyDeleteFrank does not sound like a likable fellow!
ReplyDeleteYour dialogue is fantastic! I want to know what happens next to the laywer lady. :)
ReplyDeleteI love the voice of this one. When Frank asked if she was sweet on him, it made me think of the 'olden days'. How sad that a mom would send a young child to live on the streets, though.
ReplyDeleteGreat interaction between these two. I love that Phillip goes after Frank in the end.
ReplyDeleteWonderful dialog. I love how easy it is to identify with Phillip.
ReplyDeleteGreat piece of writing and great character development. I was rooting for Phillip by the fourth paragraph. Would love to see more of him!
ReplyDeleteWell done - vivid dialogue. The characters came to life and within just a few paragraphs I was rooting for Phillip and hoping that Frank would take a hike. So glad that Phillip isn't cowardly and I'm still cheering for him!
ReplyDelete