Perches for Crows

In the End, the people began harvesting from themselves, opening up tiny sections along their waistlines to extract the fat that would run their homes for another day. Then the power went out forever, and the overhead lines were just perches for crows. The people left their useless houses and stood on concrete sidewalks staring at each other with wide and wondering eyes, blinking blindly in the star-shine.

This was written for this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge.  We were to write a story in three sentences.


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Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: Perches for Crows

Saturday, June 8, 2013

Perches for Crows

In the End, the people began harvesting from themselves, opening up tiny sections along their waistlines to extract the fat that would run their homes for another day. Then the power went out forever, and the overhead lines were just perches for crows. The people left their useless houses and stood on concrete sidewalks staring at each other with wide and wondering eyes, blinking blindly in the star-shine.

This was written for this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge.  We were to write a story in three sentences.


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39 Comments:

At June 8, 2013 at 6:58 AM , Blogger Sandra Tyler said...

strange and I would say unforgettable!

 
At June 8, 2013 at 7:24 AM , Blogger Ruby Manchanda said...

I love your second line ...

 
At June 8, 2013 at 7:30 AM , OpenID thelifeofkylie.com said...

Stunning.

 
At June 8, 2013 at 7:40 AM , Blogger Valerie said...

This is stunning-and it's like a warning of sorts of what could happen if we continue to squander the resources we have. Well done!

 
At June 8, 2013 at 7:45 AM , Anonymous Lisa D.B. Taylor said...

I love it!

 
At June 8, 2013 at 8:01 AM , Anonymous Lance said...

Yeha, that second line is just perfect. The other two are original, well crafted, and damn, I'm going to read this again.

 
At June 8, 2013 at 8:10 AM , Blogger Elisabeth Kinsey said...

Nicely dreamlike and surreal. I like how I had to go back and re-read the line about midsections.

 
At June 8, 2013 at 9:21 AM , Anonymous injaynesworld said...

If people could harvest their own fat for energy, this country could run on it forever! Very intriguing piece. Your mind goes to the most interesting places.

 
At June 8, 2013 at 10:07 AM , Anonymous steph said...

I like the capitalization of End.. says it all. Your move has taken you into new territories. So imaginative. Great piece.

 
At June 8, 2013 at 10:36 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks for reading, Sandra! Definitely strange.

 
At June 8, 2013 at 10:36 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thank you, Ruby!

 
At June 8, 2013 at 10:37 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks for reading! I enjoyed your piece this week!

 
At June 8, 2013 at 10:40 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Valerie - I loved your piece for today!

 
At June 8, 2013 at 12:46 PM , Blogger Jo-Anne Teal said...

Odd and wonderful! The image of them standing out on the sidewalks will be burned in my brain for a long time. :)))

 
At June 8, 2013 at 1:30 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thank you, Lisa!

 
At June 8, 2013 at 1:30 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks for reading, Lance! Your piece was great.

 
At June 8, 2013 at 1:31 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Elizabeth!

 
At June 8, 2013 at 1:31 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

I've been living in a hotel too long where people clean my room every day and restaurant eating is all-too-common.

 
At June 8, 2013 at 1:32 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Steph! Move will be complete on Monday.

 
At June 8, 2013 at 1:38 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks for reading, Jo-Anne!

 
At June 8, 2013 at 3:35 PM , Blogger Tara R. said...

If that's our next fuel source, I should be able to power a small, third-world country for a year. Wonderfully creative.

 
At June 8, 2013 at 3:42 PM , Blogger Maggie Grace said...

Grim foretelling of our own future. Interesting powerful story!

 
At June 8, 2013 at 7:15 PM , Blogger Ann Bennett said...

Your mind was working overtime with this piece. I'm impressed. Unfortunately, with my big stomach, everybody would have wondered off by the time we ran out of blubber.

 
At June 8, 2013 at 8:13 PM , OpenID jannatwrites said...

I don't know how you came up with this but it is so creative! This is what could happen if we keep bleeding the earth's resources.

 
At June 9, 2013 at 6:00 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Tara!

 
At June 9, 2013 at 6:00 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Hopefully not. I Googled this after I wrote it - It has been done apparently.

 
At June 9, 2013 at 6:01 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

I'm feeling so inactive since having moved into this hotel. I think that's where this idea came from. Thanks for reading, Ann.

 
At June 9, 2013 at 6:01 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Hopefully not. Thanks for reading, Janna!

 
At June 9, 2013 at 1:28 PM , Blogger lumdog2012 said...

A grim tale. Well done.

 
At June 9, 2013 at 5:31 PM , Blogger Draug said...

This is trippy--in a good way (:

 
At June 9, 2013 at 7:46 PM , Blogger Tom MacInnes said...

Now, that what I'm talkin' about when I'm talkin' about what good writing looks like. Fabulous, stunningly good work. Smells like first place come Monday, to me. :)

 
At June 10, 2013 at 5:22 AM , Blogger kymm said...

Don't know which part is creepier, Kelly, the self extractions or the wide-eyed wonder! Great story.

 
At June 10, 2013 at 10:12 AM , Anonymous Pirate said...

This is written with just the right pace, taking us inexorably to the End.The line with the crows....superb!

 
At June 10, 2013 at 10:49 AM , Blogger Lucy said...

This gave me chills! Amazing what you have done with three sentences!

 
At June 11, 2013 at 6:34 AM , Blogger Deborah Batterman said...

A perfect title to lure a reader into this brief, mystifying tale.

 
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