Red Flash


I saw the sky was painted grey;
raining tears of white.

I saw the grass was painted brown;
tips, curled down, were blue.

I saw the flash of cardinal's wing;
red projecting hope.

This was written for this weekend's Trifecta Writing Challenge:

This weekend, writers, it's up to you. We want you to choose a word and use it three times in your 33 words. However, it must be either a verb, noun or adjective and the form of the word cannot change, it must appear exactly the same three times. 



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Friday, November 22, 2013

Red Flash


I saw the sky was painted grey;
raining tears of white.

I saw the grass was painted brown;
tips, curled down, were blue.

I saw the flash of cardinal's wing;
red projecting hope.

This was written for this weekend's Trifecta Writing Challenge:

This weekend, writers, it's up to you. We want you to choose a word and use it three times in your 33 words. However, it must be either a verb, noun or adjective and the form of the word cannot change, it must appear exactly the same three times. 



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28 Comments:

At November 22, 2013 at 9:37 AM , Blogger Kir said...

Colors, words and thought provoking scenes. You never disappoint with your beautiful brush strokes of words.

And Hope being the highlight brought the piece full circle, after the tears and the loss is the Hope.

Loved it.

 
At November 22, 2013 at 9:39 AM , Blogger Joe Govan said...

Lovely descriptive language. Good one!

 
At November 22, 2013 at 9:40 AM , Anonymous JannaTWrites said...

I love how the colors noticed go from depressing to hopeful in the glimpse of a cardinal's wing.
P.S. Congrats on your win the last challenge. Your story stuck in my mind long after I read it.

 
At November 22, 2013 at 9:57 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks so much, Kir! Looking forward to a weekend of three-word reading!

 
At November 22, 2013 at 9:57 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thank you, Joe!

 
At November 22, 2013 at 9:57 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

I appreciate it, Janna! Looking forward to reading your entry this week.

 
At November 22, 2013 at 2:18 PM , OpenID justpratibha said...

Wow! What a nice imagery. Really well written.

 
At November 22, 2013 at 3:30 PM , Blogger Kathy said...

Beautiful!

 
At November 22, 2013 at 5:59 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks for reading!

 
At November 22, 2013 at 5:59 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Kathy!

 
At November 22, 2013 at 6:59 PM , Blogger Ruby Manchanda said...

You worked magic here

 
At November 22, 2013 at 7:22 PM , Anonymous Brian said...

Incredible! The sounds and pace are perfect - especially that second stanza with the rhyme half way through the line. A great, tight poem.

 
At November 23, 2013 at 5:04 AM , Blogger Trifecta said...

Agree with Brian on this one, tightly written and beautiful, not easy to do but you do it. Thanks for linking up!

 
At November 23, 2013 at 6:00 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks so much, Ruby - Spending the day getting caught up with my Trifecta reading - Looking forward to your entry.

 
At November 23, 2013 at 6:00 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Wow, thanks so much Brian - Looking forward to reading your entry.

 
At November 23, 2013 at 6:00 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Trifecta!

 
At November 23, 2013 at 4:22 PM , Blogger Suzanne Purkis said...

Those flashes of red are my favourite part of winter. This is so gorgeous Kelly! Seamless use of your chosen word.

 
At November 23, 2013 at 11:09 PM , Blogger Atreyee said...

Such beautiful imagery-just lovely!

 
At November 24, 2013 at 5:29 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks so much, Suzanne!

 
At November 24, 2013 at 5:29 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thank you, Atreyee.

 
At November 24, 2013 at 6:19 AM , OpenID mademoisellespleasure said...

A very beautiful prompt !

 
At November 24, 2013 at 6:46 AM , Blogger Ivy said...

Simply gorgeous! But I would expect nothing less from you.

Congrats on your much-deserved companion win!

 
At November 24, 2013 at 1:38 PM , OpenID trudgingthroughfog said...

WOW. This is absolutely gorgeous, every word. It was so well done that I wasn't even conscious of the prompt! That last line reminds us of the sort of thing that gets us through the winter.

 
At November 24, 2013 at 3:42 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks so much!

 
At November 24, 2013 at 3:42 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks, Ivy.

 
At November 24, 2013 at 3:43 PM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thanks so much for reading and commenting!

 
At November 25, 2013 at 3:57 AM , Blogger kymm said...

Of course, the whole is beautiful.
But the imagery of the first stanza
and the sound of the second are absolutely entrancing.
< 3

 
At November 25, 2013 at 4:02 AM , Blogger Kelly Garriott Waite said...

Thank you, Kymm!

 

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