Love, Outlasted

Despite thickening waists and skin deeply creased and backs bent beyond necessity, every morning they greeted each other with tender smiles.  But his brain began to fuse and confuse and one morning over coffee he looked at her and said, “who are you?”

Their marriage lasted another eight years until she died of heartache and loneliness.

This is another attempt at Trifecta's Three Sentence Challenge.

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Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: Love, Outlasted

Friday, February 3, 2012

Love, Outlasted

Despite thickening waists and skin deeply creased and backs bent beyond necessity, every morning they greeted each other with tender smiles.  But his brain began to fuse and confuse and one morning over coffee he looked at her and said, “who are you?”

Their marriage lasted another eight years until she died of heartache and loneliness.

This is another attempt at Trifecta's Three Sentence Challenge.

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24 Comments:

At February 3, 2012 at 4:29 PM , Anonymous Dana said...

This is an especially rich story that in just three sentences really conveyed a sense of the span of time and the life of a marriage. Well done.

 
At February 3, 2012 at 4:31 PM , Anonymous Booguloo said...

Very sad.

 
At February 3, 2012 at 6:18 PM , Anonymous Kgwaite said...

Thanks for reading.

 
At February 3, 2012 at 6:19 PM , Anonymous Kgwaite said...

Thanks, Dana. I wasn't happy with my first try. This one seemed better.

 
At February 3, 2012 at 6:53 PM , Anonymous Dana said...

*sniffle* Tear-jerking... so well written!!

 
At February 3, 2012 at 7:27 PM , Anonymous Pamelitasayers said...

How very sad. :(

Pamela

 
At February 3, 2012 at 9:03 PM , Anonymous jesterqueen1 said...

At the risk of repeating everybody else, that's so sad. I liked the ironic twist that she died of heartbreak before he died of the dementia, alzheimers or whatever it was that stole him from her.

 
At February 4, 2012 at 11:20 AM , Anonymous Soul Dipper said...

Powerful! When we writers take the time to peel off the excess, we really do have some incredible gems. This is a fine example of that. This was punch in the gut. Well done.

 
At February 5, 2012 at 12:55 AM , Anonymous Trifectawritingchallenge said...

Thanks for linking up to Trifextra: Week 2. You've given us such a sad little tale, so complete in its three short sentences. This is timely for me, having just talked with my husband about growing old. Sometimes it seems the best is yet to come; some times it feels like it's slipping behind us. Thanks for your thought-provoking read. Hope you'll come back on Monday.

 
At February 5, 2012 at 4:15 AM , Anonymous jaum said...

Perfect example of a whole story unfolding with an economy of words. I liked this one much better than the first.

 
At February 5, 2012 at 7:10 AM , Anonymous Kim said...

Oh so sad. Lovely.
Came from the Trifecta link.

 
At February 5, 2012 at 7:10 AM , Anonymous Gina said...

So sad. Dementia is frightening and heartbreaking. Great story. Over from Trifecta

 
At February 5, 2012 at 9:06 AM , Anonymous Satu Gustafson said...

Oh yes...this is very very sad. :( Powerful writing!

 
At February 5, 2012 at 1:55 PM , Anonymous Frelle said...

what a kick to the stomach, and the aching. i cant imagine. i know it happens to so many couples, and the reality of it happening to me is terrifying. a beautiful and sad story.

 
At February 5, 2012 at 3:27 PM , Anonymous Kgwaite said...

Thanks for reading!

 
At February 5, 2012 at 3:27 PM , Anonymous Kgwaite said...

Thanks for reading. This was a fun prompt.

 
At February 5, 2012 at 3:27 PM , Anonymous Kgwaite said...

Thanks, Gina.

 
At February 5, 2012 at 3:28 PM , Anonymous Kgwaite said...

Thanks, Kim.

 
At February 5, 2012 at 3:29 PM , Anonymous Kgwaite said...

I liked this one better, too.

 
At February 5, 2012 at 3:29 PM , Anonymous Kgwaite said...

Thanks for reading! This was a fun prompt to write to.

 
At February 5, 2012 at 3:30 PM , Anonymous Kgwaite said...

Thank you! Writing spare is hard for me.

 
At February 5, 2012 at 3:30 PM , Anonymous Kgwaite said...

Thanks for reading!

 
At February 5, 2012 at 3:31 PM , Anonymous Kgwaite said...

Thanks for reading!

 
At February 5, 2012 at 3:31 PM , Anonymous Kgwaite said...

Thanks, Dana!

 

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