Refracted


The last strains of sunlight lingered in the corners, grasping every available point of refraction.  She slid her fingertips along the glass wondering if this was all there ever was. Or could be.  Of course it was all.  But she’d wanted more.  She lifted the hammer into the air and brought it down against the glass table.  If she couldn’t have it, neither could the sun.

This was written in response to this weekend's Trifecta Writing Challenge.  

For this weekend's challenge, we'd like you to read the 33 words below and then add 33 of your own words to move the story along.  Have a great weekend and good luck!
The last strains of sunlight lingered in the corners, grasping every available point of refraction.  She slid her fingertips along the glass wondering if this was all there ever was. Or could be.

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Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: Refracted

Friday, September 7, 2012

Refracted


The last strains of sunlight lingered in the corners, grasping every available point of refraction.  She slid her fingertips along the glass wondering if this was all there ever was. Or could be.  Of course it was all.  But she’d wanted more.  She lifted the hammer into the air and brought it down against the glass table.  If she couldn’t have it, neither could the sun.

This was written in response to this weekend's Trifecta Writing Challenge.  

For this weekend's challenge, we'd like you to read the 33 words below and then add 33 of your own words to move the story along.  Have a great weekend and good luck!
The last strains of sunlight lingered in the corners, grasping every available point of refraction.  She slid her fingertips along the glass wondering if this was all there ever was. Or could be.

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20 Comments:

At September 7, 2012 at 11:07 AM , Anonymous Carrie said...

people in glass houses... :) It starts out so calming, magical and then WHAMMO!

 
At September 7, 2012 at 12:16 PM , Anonymous Jessie Powell said...

I LOVE the way you took what could have been mistaken for a sense of wonder and turned it into vengeance and disgust. YEAH

 
At September 7, 2012 at 1:16 PM , Anonymous Deborah Batterman said...

In a word: 'shattering' . . . Especially when you think about how easily the words given could been a set-up for something of a more 'meditative' note.

 
At September 7, 2012 at 2:42 PM , Anonymous Kenya Johnson said...

My goodness, I didn't see that coming! Love the title.

 
At September 7, 2012 at 3:48 PM , Anonymous Renada Styles said...

nice! most pieces have led into a melancholy, but your response retaliated. love it.

 
At September 7, 2012 at 7:11 PM , Anonymous Stephanie B. said...

I echo the previous comment. A strong, confident response. Venting, maybe, her action, I mean? For us to ponder.

 
At September 7, 2012 at 8:44 PM , Anonymous Ruby Manchanda said...

I like the twist. I definitely enjoyed this one.

 
At September 7, 2012 at 9:59 PM , Anonymous JannaTWrites said...

I like that this didn't end how I expected it to. Nice job with 33 words!

 
At September 7, 2012 at 11:58 PM , Anonymous Steve Lavigne said...

Wowsers don't want to get on the wrong side of her... enjoyed the story good take on the prompt

 
At September 8, 2012 at 12:02 AM , OpenID natalieamatera said...

Simply, wow.

 
At September 8, 2012 at 4:16 AM , Blogger lumdog2012 said...

I enjoyed this. Great twist.

 
At September 8, 2012 at 4:24 AM , Anonymous Celeste Neumann said...

Very nice imagery.

 
At September 8, 2012 at 4:25 AM , Anonymous Celeste Neumann said...

Very nice imagery.

 
At September 8, 2012 at 4:48 AM , Anonymous kgwaite said...

lumdog2012 has left a new comment on your post "Refracted":

I enjoyed this. Great twist.

 
At September 8, 2012 at 12:39 PM , Anonymous Max said...

I like the fatalistic twist! Unexpected...

 
At September 8, 2012 at 4:52 PM , Anonymous Christine said...

Ooo, I like that - the vehemence of the hammer, the notion of the sun reaching for more than it could have. Very nice.

 
At September 8, 2012 at 8:04 PM , Anonymous Tessa said...

Well that wasn't what I was expecting. Like the phrase - If she couldn’t have it, neither could the sun. Sounds like a lot of relationships. Great job!

 
At September 9, 2012 at 4:32 AM , Anonymous Lance said...

the glass an antagonist is a great twist. very good stuff, KG

 
At September 9, 2012 at 12:25 PM , Anonymous deanaburson said...

I really like this.. Well written.

 
At September 9, 2012 at 1:31 PM , Anonymous Amyharrison said...

This was so good :D You have written so well and the twist is awesome :d

 

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