Apricot


As she waited for the nine-seventeen train, watching lingering farewells and ecstatic reunions, Isodora smiled to herself and picked away her apricot nail polish.  It’d been his favorite color.  She preferred blood red. 

This was written in response to a Trifecta Writing Challenge. We were to write the last 33 words of a story.


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Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: Apricot

Friday, August 17, 2012

Apricot


As she waited for the nine-seventeen train, watching lingering farewells and ecstatic reunions, Isodora smiled to herself and picked away her apricot nail polish.  It’d been his favorite color.  She preferred blood red. 

This was written in response to a Trifecta Writing Challenge. We were to write the last 33 words of a story.


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17 Comments:

At August 17, 2012 at 3:54 PM , Anonymous OldDogNewTits said...

Ooh. What happened before she went to the train station? Seriously, WHAT HAPPENED?

 
At August 17, 2012 at 4:40 PM , Anonymous kgwaite said...

Ha! Really don't know. I read the last line in the novel in my drawer and hated it, so I put this down instead. Felt a bit first-linish to me.

 
At August 17, 2012 at 4:59 PM , Anonymous jaum said...

Is Isadora evil??

 
At August 17, 2012 at 5:19 PM , Anonymous kgwaite said...

No idea, but seems that way, doesn't it?

 
At August 17, 2012 at 6:11 PM , Anonymous Mel said...

Oh my goodness. This is a serious nail biter. Way to go! Great ending.

 
At August 17, 2012 at 6:54 PM , Blogger lumdog2012 said...

She's smiles, so it seems like a happy ending for her, not so sure about him. Interesting ending. This is one I'd like to read the whole thing. Great imagery in the train station.

 
At August 18, 2012 at 4:29 AM , Anonymous kgwaite said...

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She's smiles, so it seems like a happy ending for her, not so sure about him. Interesting ending. This is one I'd like to read the whole thing. Great imagery in the train station.

 
At August 18, 2012 at 8:11 AM , Anonymous Annette Mickelson said...

oooh, love that last line. Blood red... yipes!

 
At August 18, 2012 at 9:28 AM , Anonymous Paula J said...

So deliciously malevolent. Or was he just asking for it? Love the train station details.

 
At August 18, 2012 at 9:44 AM , Anonymous Ruby Manchanda said...

This sounds a happy ever after kind of thing for Isodora

 
At August 18, 2012 at 10:11 AM , Anonymous Linda Vernon said...

Ah! The perfect ending! That apricot had to go! :D

 
At August 18, 2012 at 4:47 PM , Anonymous Tessa said...

Well sure caught my attention. Nicely done!

 
At August 19, 2012 at 5:49 PM , Anonymous Jayne said...

Very intriguing. love these types of writing challenges and will have to visit the Trifecta site. I've been having great fun with flash fiction lately.

 
At August 20, 2012 at 1:22 AM , Anonymous Trifectawritingchallenge said...

Oooooo. I like this! Love your detail about the train. Great job with the prompt!

 
At August 20, 2012 at 6:28 AM , Anonymous Annabelle said...

I love what an empowering flavor this has to it. Clearly, this story had a happy ending!

 
At August 20, 2012 at 4:06 PM , Anonymous Stacey said...

So much said in so few words. It definitely makes you hungry for the rest of the story!

 
At August 21, 2012 at 11:17 AM , Anonymous lucilleinthesky said...

Brilliant. What happens next?

 

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