Metaphor


Fourteen hour days and pesticide-laced dreams. Sixty dollars a day to feed the children. Air-conditioned men in business suits watch through backward-facing binoculars calculating profits. This is your pleasure. This is our bondage.




This was linked up to this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge.  We were to write a metaphor based upon one of several photographic prompts.


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Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: Metaphor

Friday, October 5, 2012

Metaphor


Fourteen hour days and pesticide-laced dreams. Sixty dollars a day to feed the children. Air-conditioned men in business suits watch through backward-facing binoculars calculating profits. This is your pleasure. This is our bondage.




This was linked up to this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge.  We were to write a metaphor based upon one of several photographic prompts.


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11 Comments:

At October 5, 2012 at 6:49 PM , Anonymous TLanceB said...

awesome...very Grapes of Wrath-like

I like the last line

 
At October 5, 2012 at 7:43 PM , Anonymous Andrea said...

"pesticide laced dream"...very powerful.

 
At October 5, 2012 at 8:10 PM , Anonymous Gina said...

"Backward facing binoculars" hit me as did "this is our bondage"

So many people living totally different lives in this country/world. Nicely described.

 
At October 5, 2012 at 8:14 PM , Anonymous Jessie Powell said...

Simply exquisite. Sixty dollars a day to feed the children. Perfect. Ouch. But perfect.

 
At October 5, 2012 at 10:09 PM , Anonymous Ruby Manchanda said...

Stunner.

 
At October 6, 2012 at 7:04 AM , Anonymous Sandratyler said...

Wow, that's a hard prompt! I think I'll stick to their word prompts:) but you did a great job with this one.

 
At October 6, 2012 at 7:29 AM , Anonymous lumdog said...

Great commentary and well written.

 
At October 6, 2012 at 8:14 AM , Anonymous Kenya Johnson said...

Wow! I imagine peddlers standing behind the photographer.

 
At October 6, 2012 at 10:27 AM , Anonymous Stephanie B. said...

Powerful. I like backward facing binoculars. And so sad - but so true.

 
At October 7, 2012 at 9:09 AM , Anonymous Renada Styles said...

that is so true! i like the idea of the backward binoculars. well done.

 
At October 7, 2012 at 7:55 PM , Anonymous Jayne said...

I live in a rural area where I watch those who toil in the fields in all kinds of weather, back-killing hard work, so that I can eat. There is no more noble profession. Excellent take on the prompt.

 

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