Raindrops


If rain held color, taste and smell, each drop would be a memory of you. But shattered raindrops run like tears and your image slowly blurs, like chalk paintings washed away in spring.

This was written for this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge. We were to do a 33 word free write.


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Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: Raindrops

Saturday, November 30, 2013

Raindrops


If rain held color, taste and smell, each drop would be a memory of you. But shattered raindrops run like tears and your image slowly blurs, like chalk paintings washed away in spring.

This was written for this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge. We were to do a 33 word free write.


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12 Comments:

At November 30, 2013 at 8:16 PM , OpenID momosapien said...

Gorgeous, Kelly. Each drop would be a memory of you is so sweet and full of longing.

 
At December 1, 2013 at 12:00 AM , Blogger Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver) said...

Time heals and rounds the edges of pain. Very nicely done, Kelly.

 
At December 1, 2013 at 6:15 AM , Blogger Valerie Boersma said...

This took my breath away. Lovely, Kelly!

 
At December 1, 2013 at 11:38 AM , Blogger Atreyee said...

Ohh-the last line is just exquisite!

 
At December 1, 2013 at 12:17 PM , Anonymous steph said...

I had a chalk painting by my niece all summer (no rain in CA in the summers). It recently washed away in the autumn rain. I watched it over the course of a couple of days. Makes this piece all the more exquisite with that memory.

 
At December 1, 2013 at 2:33 PM , Blogger Tooie said...

I love this!

 
At December 1, 2013 at 3:41 PM , Blogger kymm said...

Ah, Kelly, I can see, taste and smell the chalk paintings washing away.
What a beautiful connection - raindrop and memory.

 
At December 1, 2013 at 8:00 PM , Blogger Draug said...

Oh wow this is awesome.

 
At December 1, 2013 at 8:52 PM , Blogger Yeshasvi Mahadev said...

This is beautifully written. I love how you gave raindrops a new facade!

 
At December 1, 2013 at 8:53 PM , Blogger Yeshasvi Mahadev said...

Face*

 
At December 2, 2013 at 12:15 AM , Blogger Trifecta said...

This paints such a strong visual image. Well done.

 
At December 2, 2013 at 4:15 AM , Blogger j umbaugh said...

Another vivid story. really liked the starting sentence "If rain held color, taste and smell, each drop would be a memory of you"!

 

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