Myopic


Tree roots cup snowmelt, miniature basins gathering light and returning it to the
stars, a dazzle of sunshine guilding the frosty air. I pass, myopic, intent on the cell phone jangling my pocket.

This was written for this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge:

On to the weekend prompt. This weekend we're asking you to add thirty of your own words to the following three words for a total of thirty-three. Good luck!
myopic
dazzle  
basin



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Writing in the Margins, Bursting at the Seams: Myopic

Friday, December 6, 2013

Myopic


Tree roots cup snowmelt, miniature basins gathering light and returning it to the
stars, a dazzle of sunshine guilding the frosty air. I pass, myopic, intent on the cell phone jangling my pocket.

This was written for this week's Trifecta Writing Challenge:

On to the weekend prompt. This weekend we're asking you to add thirty of your own words to the following three words for a total of thirty-three. Good luck!
myopic
dazzle  
basin



Labels:

15 Comments:

At December 6, 2013 at 7:36 AM , OpenID joe2poetry said...

That's a good one! The things we miss because of our phones.

 
At December 6, 2013 at 7:40 AM , Blogger Tempest Nightingale LeTrope said...

Darn phones do have a tendency to make one lose focus!

 
At December 6, 2013 at 11:34 AM , OpenID humantriumphant said...

oh, good one!

 
At December 6, 2013 at 2:51 PM , Anonymous Lance said...

one of my favorites. A solid message of ignoring beauty for momentary things. Loved this, so well done in 33 words. *fist bump*

 
At December 6, 2013 at 6:04 PM , Blogger Valerie Boersma said...

First off, I loved how you used the word "guilding." It brings such a pretty image to mind. And second, this is so sadly true. In the midst of stunning beauty, some people just can't seem to see farther than the end of their phone;)

 
At December 6, 2013 at 9:15 PM , Anonymous steph said...

Returning it to the stars.. guilding the frosty air... love the poetry. And then the cell phone, of course, all that is there even if we don't see it.

 
At December 6, 2013 at 9:41 PM , OpenID jeremymilburn said...

Beautiful description, and sadly true finish. Great work!

 
At December 7, 2013 at 12:00 AM , OpenID momosapien said...

I agree with Valerie and Steph, your language here is gorgeous, especially guilding. Excellent write, Kelly!

 
At December 7, 2013 at 9:47 AM , Blogger kymm said...

Absolutely gorgeous, and you totally rocked the wording!

 
At December 7, 2013 at 3:26 PM , Blogger Glynis Rankin said...

Yes! What else can I say that has not already been said. Such an amazing write in every way.

 
At December 7, 2013 at 5:43 PM , Blogger C.C. said...

Beautiful. What a timely reminder to just stop and breathe in the beauty of the winter wonderland outside :-)

 
At December 8, 2013 at 7:51 AM , OpenID darkcirclesetc said...

Hit the nail on the head! :)

 
At December 8, 2013 at 2:43 PM , Blogger Atreyee said...

Am dazzled by this brilliant take-awesome!

 
At December 8, 2013 at 7:39 PM , Blogger Ivy said...

Stunningly gorgeous and painfully true. Great work!

 
At December 8, 2013 at 10:09 PM , OpenID trudgingthroughfog said...

I've been guilty of this myself, and it never fails to make me ashamed. Great writing.

 

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