I wished him into being.
Three times, I wished a man to complete
me.
“You asked for it,” he says, as
bruises bloom across my cheek.
For a moment, I believe him.
This was written for this weekend's Trifecta Writing Challenge.
On to the weekend challenge. The Monkey's Paw, a short story by W.W. Jacobs, is about the strings that come with granted wishes. We are asking you to write 33 words exactly about three wishes that come at a high price to the wisher.
Dark... I wonder - was it one man as the result of three wishes, or three different men who all treated her like this? The latter is even more chilling, I think.
ReplyDeleteWow, that is good. I have witness too many women who wish and take whatever they can get. It's sad. Great job.
ReplyDeleteI wondered if it was one man or three, too. I think it's one. One very awful one.
ReplyDeleteye ouch! good write. like the ending
ReplyDeleteRough. Good writing. Just rough subject.
ReplyDeleteThe "...I believe him." is the saddest part. I think this is why some women never get out of the trap. This is very real.
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ReplyDeleteThe "...I believe him." is the saddest part. I think this is why some women never get out of the trap. This is very real.
great writing. I believe that no man can complete you. You should be complete yourself before any relationship could work.
ReplyDeleteDark! But so interesting, Like the comments and observations of other.
ReplyDeleteTsk. So hard to watch any man or woman believe they deserve less than straightforward love and nurturing.
ReplyDeleteSmart take. I got it to mean the character made the requisite three wishes. Wishes of these types are especially dangerous, eh? Great write.
Ouch. Are we our own worst enemy...
ReplyDeleteI missed this over the weekend. Oh yes well deserved winner. Great writing, Evocative and unfortunately real.
ReplyDeleteI missed this over the weekend. Oh yes well deserved winner. Great writing. Evocative and unfortunately real.
ReplyDeleteThis piece has such a ring of truth to it. Having dealt with vicitms of domestic abuse in my professional life, it is all too common for the pattern to be repeated three or more times. There is a danger to the societal pressure to buy into the romantic ideal of needing someone "to complete" you. Congratulations on your finish in the challenge; it is well-deserved.
ReplyDeleteI was out of town this weekend, and I totally missed this. Ouch.
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